Dr. Jamie Bondage

I loved this! It is really funny! The only mistake I spotted was, "And next to the counter, guess what found?" "She" should be inserted after "what" This was really ...

This was amazing! Really. I don't know what to critique about this poem. It really did blow me away. I love the imagery you present. Poetry is such a beautiful ...

Well...this is a start. 1. In lines 3 and 4, you use the word "look" twice, which does not follow with true grammatical editing. Change the second look. Also, every ...

I like it in general. The words convey a very vivid picture in the reader's mind. I do not like the flow of the poem, but that is a personal ...

First for gramatical errors: 1. Baby, I don’t what to do anymore; "Know" should be after don't. 2. Do you even know what love? "Is" should be after love. I ...

Okay, like you said, it's not long. Therefore, there's not much to correct. Your off to a good start though. I saw one error. "He went to met his girlfriend..." ...

First for specifics: 1. I didn't like to sleep much and I wasn't an insomniac. Contractions are bad writing. Izm sorry. a few are okay, and in dialogue it's fine, ...

Here I go. Hope this helps: 1.Brooke took a small sip of her wine and smiled at her two friends. The year before she had turned fourteen (only three years ...

That is is a pretty short piece, so there's not a lot to critique. I did find a couple of errors. 1."Passerbys were casting me strange looks as I stumbled ...

That was so sweeet! I'd make it a longer story though. this, to me, almost seems like a prolouge to a story. it's really good though! I did't see any ...

This was interesting. I didn't see any gramatical errors. All the sentences seemed correct. This seemed really short. I loved your description. it was great. but there doesnzt seem like ...

It's to short. Also, what are you trying to say? good songs, at least to me, normally convey some kind of feeling or emotion or struggle. I think you need ...

This was amazing! It's really good!!!!! The only mistake that I saw was that you didn't italicize every thought that the hippo had. also, it could've been more detailed. like, ...

I liked it! One thing that was confusing t me was what parts exactly were part of the song and what parts were in the story. I would suggest making ...

I like it! It's got good rythem and movement. it flows well. I started singing it in my head! Lol. my only complaint is that it seems really short. I ...